Monday, May 20th, 2013

Happy Monday—our last one of this school year!

Ø May 20^th, 2013

When You Come In

1.      Please sign in.

2.     Grab your folder off the heater (or out of your bag, if you took it home this weekend).

3.     Review your Revision #1 and Revision #2 from Friday.

4.     Make sure you’ve inserted “Revision #1” or “Revision #2” in front of the original title

5.     Share your BEST revision with me now on google drive, and I will discuss it with you during workshop time later today.

Today:

Turn in all items to your file cabinet folder, please.  Thanks!

Big Ideas for this Week—Again!

1.                       Showing, Not Just Telling

2.                      Diction—Have that Vocabulary Variety sheet out every day!

3.                      Revision!

Review—Quickety-Quick!

1.                       Difference between “literal” and “figurative” language (p. 26)

2.                      Diction (Sandra Cisneros; p. 26)

3.                      Vocabulary Variety

4.                      Imagery (Emily Bronte)--page 27

5.                      Imagery (Hot Chocolate Sentence)--page 28

Writing Lesson—(Figurative Language)  Metaphors and Similes

1.                       Similes and metaphors are almost identical—they both compare two unlike things.  Similes, however, are less direct.  They use “like” or “as”.

2.                      I’m going to give you a prompt, and you finish it with a simile.

a.     School is a ____________________.

b.    My house is a ________________.

c.     My brother/sister is like a ____________________.

d.    My job (extra-curricular) is like _______________________________.

3.                      Pair-share page 60.  I have a partner for you already—you’re welcome!

a.     Put a SMILEY FACE by the ones you LIKE and think are strong!

b.    Put a question mark or a tongue-face by the ones you don’t really get—they’re not putting a clear picture in your head.

c.     Discuss as a class the ones you feel are strongest.

4.                      Pair-share Alleged Actual Analogies and Metaphors (pp. 58-59)

a.     Follow the directions under “What You Do” on page 58.

b.    Class discussion

Writing Lesson:  (Figurative Language) Similes

a.     Notes (p. 28)

b.    Simile Columns Overhead

Writing Assignment:  Snapshot Poem (page 67-69)

1.      Models—is the writer including the material from the worksheet?

2.     You fill out the white page first; then start typing your Snapshot Poem.

3.     I’ll give you the rubric tomorrow, and we will work on the poem in class tomorrow.

People Who Had EB Staffers Peer Conference Your Work

1.                       Take a look at the white board.  These EB staffers read and commented on your work.  I want you to carefully review their comments today.  You received comments that will help you make final revisions over the next few days.

2.                      E-mail them and me to say thank-you.  I’ll show you how.

REVISION WORKSHOP

2^nd Start:  10:40

4^th Start:  2:05

Revision #3  (Prose)

Do not choose the following

Ø Six-word memoirs

Ø Fifty-word stories

1.                       Select ONE of the prose (non-poem) pieces you know you want to make major revisions to, then include in your portfolio.

2.                      Open it up in google (or type it, if it is currently handwritten), and start making changes to make the piece stronger.

a.     Review my comments and/or your peer comments carefully, and think about how they could help you strengthen your piece.

b.    Strengthen the title.

c.     Add detail to show, instead of just tell.

d.    Cut unnecessary words and phrases.

e.     Switch items around as needed to create a smooth flow.

f.      Take out weak, non-descriptive words, and replace them with strong, precise words.  Use your Vocabulary Variety sheet.

g.    Include dialogue, if you feel that will strengthen the piece.

h.    Paragraph the piece so it’s reader-friendly.

3.                      Click on “File”, then “See Revision History”—does it look like you did substantial revision (AT LEAST fifteen changes)?

4.                      Then add the word “Revision #3” in front of your title.

Revision #4 (Poetry)

Do not choose the following to revise:

Ø Sense Poem

Ø Autobio Poem

Ø  Follow all the same steps above, except when you get to #4, type “Revision #4” in front of your title.

11:10

Ø  If you have a piece you want read and peer conferenced for helpful comments, share it with me now, and write the name of the piece and your name on the white board.

HOMEWORK:  Portfolio

1.                       Gather portfolio materials.

2.                      Do more thinking about which ten will go in there.

3.                      Remember, we’re writing a Snapshot Poem next week that will probably phenomenal—that could be your tenth.

4.                      Lay out one page, to see how it’s going to work.

5.                      OR Start building, to see if it’s going to happen the way you envision.