AP English Peeps
September 78rd, 2013
Final Draft due Friday, with clean rubric
“Elegy for Jane” by Theodore Roethke (p. 10)
Welcome to Creative Writing!
Ø Happy Monday, September 23th, 2013
Autobiographical Poem Revision to Second,
1. Think about everything I’m saying as it relates to YOUR POEM and the changes you might make to it to make I stronger.
2. Look at the following snippets, and consider the following in your own poem:
· Am I using vivid detail (appealing to one of the senses)?
· Am I being creative in my responses—not just throwing down the first thing that comes to mind?
· Raise your hand if you have the word “Me” in your title.
· Look at the following titles that do NOT have “Me” in them. What makes them strong?
· A Whole Different Window
· Casting Into Carissa’s Life
· Just Like the President
· More Than a Blonde Cheerleader
· The Name I Got, the Name I’ll Keep
2) Line Breaks
We have talked about line breaks a lot, but I’m wondering how carefully you’ve considered how and why you are breaking your lines. When you have four details on a line, it’s hard for the reader to absorb all that. Look carefully at your breaks. Is the word at the end of each line a powerful one?
Unfortunate older brother
Who is always blamed for everything
* * * *
Who gives hugs to the people I love
and nothing to the people I don’t particularly like
3) Concrete Detail—SPECIFICS!
(SHOW who you are; be specific and descriptive; the reader can hear a PERSON there!)
Who needs a faster internet connection
Some ice cold Mt. Dew
And mostly, crispy, stuffed, Hot Pockets
Who feels great after a long run by myself
Who would like to see a Christmas wedding, tinkling lights in the dark cold night.
Lover of the rain
The sweet country air in the Fall
Sweet-and-sour filled Twizzlers
And stargazing on those beautiful summer nights
4) Order—what’s first? Second? Third? It matters!
Who fears staying home alone at night,
Drowning in a lake when it’s dark,
And making wrong decisions throughout my life.
5) Strong Diction
· Lover of large rooms illuminated with dim candlelight.
· Who fears being an outlier
· A prisoner of Washington, Iowa
· A speck of dust in Washington
· He is the denizen of a glass box (instead of “resident of”)
6) Sibling of….
Sometimes a best friend,
Sometimes a complete enemy
But always a sister of Anne, John, and Michael
Sibling of a future engineer (Alfonso)
Brother of a librarian (Angel)
Brother to an annoying younger sister (Aylin)
The mature, older (even if younger) sister to a college freshman,
· Who fears seeing spiders scamper across my floor…. (s)
· Queen of quirky (q)
· With two smaller siblings (s)
· Who needs to sleep as much as a sloth (s)
· Fat from wrestling (f)
· Are all the important words in your title capitalized?
· Are your lines broken where you INTENTIONALLY broke them, for greatest effect?
· Have you included specifics: examples, colors, textures, sounds, details?
Independent Work Time = 12:40-1:20 (plus five minutes prior to lunch)
Revising Your Autobio Poem
· Monday, September 23,2013
Review from Friday
Work Time = 9:00-9:25