Wednesday, February 20th, 2013

Revision Day—Wednesday, 2/20/2013 (Fifty Minutes)

Your Goal

Ø  Make two pieces of writing substantially stronger by using all the lessons you’ve learned this term.

Ø  Take your time, and craft this revision.  If you finish in ten minutes, I guarantee your performance and grade will reflect that lack of work ethic.

How I’ll Grade This

Ø  Next week I’ll call you into the library one at a time, and we’ll review your documents on google to see that you’ve mastered all the items below.  (There is no paperwork for you to fill out today.)

What You Can Do to Check Yourself

Ø  Follow the directions below exactly.

Ø  Go to “File”, then “See Revision History” to make sure your changes are there.

Ø  Computer guidelines:  google drive; online synonym/dictionary; grooveshark/Pandora; free rice (only if you finish early)

Earliest Memory Poem (Revision)

1.      Read your poem with fresh eyes today.

2.     Delete all material but the poem.  (Make sure you copy and paste your STORY into a separate document, in case you want to use it later in your portfolio.

3.     Review and consider the notes I made on your poem when we talked in the library.

4.     Do all of the following to revise:

a.     Add details to create more imagery

b.     Subtract/Cut any words not vital for sense (dead words, repetitive phrasings)

c.     Substitute Vocabulary Variety words for non-descriptive or boring ones.

d.     Switch words, phrases, and/or lines around as needed to create a smooth flow

e.     Give this a knock-out title

5.     Make at least substantial ten revisions/changes, and probably many more.

6.     Edit your poem for grammatical perfection.

7.     Print a copy to the Media Center, front and back, and I’ll send someone down in a few to pick them up.

8.     Staple your REVISED DRAFT ON TOP of your original, then lay it on the heater at the end of class.

Musical Memory Revision

1.      Get out your Musical Memory.

2.     Re-read it.

3.     Read carefully over your peer conferencer's comments.  You got some solid comments.  You need to mine these for all the gold you can!

4.     Do all of the following to revise:

a.     Add details to create more imagery

b.     Subtract/Cut any words not vital for sense (dead words, repetitive phrasings)

c.     Substitute Vocabulary Variety words for non-descriptive or boring ones.

d.     Switch words, phrases, and/or lines around as needed to create a smooth flow

e.     Give this a knock-out title

f.      Put in paragraphs as needed to show when you are shifting gears.

5.     Make at least ten revisions/changes, and probably many more.

6.     Edit your poem for grammatical perfection.

7.     Print a copy to the Media Center, front and back, and I’ll send someone down in a few to pick them up.

8.     Staple your REVISED DRAFT ON TOP of your original, then lay it on the heater at the end of class.

Homework

• 3,000 total grains in freerice
• Make sure you are playing IN OUR CLASS GROUP, or your grains don't show!  :-(